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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 word

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In recent years many think that only the
government
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 and large-scale institutions can improve the environmental situation and that regular
people
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 can't contribute in
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 manner , I totally disagree with
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 notion as I believe both sides should
work
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 together to help make change for our surroundings .
To begin
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 with , if the
government
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 and big businesses were to spend millions on projects that will help save the
environment
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 without cooperation from the
people
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 it would never be successful , because on
one
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 side the authorities are building and individuals are
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 destroying from their ignorance ,
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 , the
government
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 of India has spent billions of dollars in
environment
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-related infrastructure ,
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 , Indian cities are
one
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 of the most polluted around the world
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 is a result of
people
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 not following the instructions set to help preserve the
environment
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,
therefore
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 , no change is happening despite the billions spent .
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 , it's the other way around as well, meaning if governments neglect the
environment
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 and
people
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 become responsible it won't
work
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 out ,
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 , they alongside big companies should
work
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 on the same terms ,
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 , another nation a successful
one
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this
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 time
is
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 Sweden ,
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 country is a great model on how all levels of the society
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together with
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 the local authorities to save the
environment
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 , Swedish citizens feel they are responsible to save their own land ,
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 , they make vast efforts to improve their
environment
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 by simple things like recycling their plastic bottles ,with that said , the
government
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 and big companies
such
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 as Ikea , hold big campaigns to spread awareness about how to help save
this
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 precious land of theirs,
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 , they have
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 of the best air qualities worldwide and is considered by many as the ''cleanest nation on earth '' .
To sum up
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 , improving the
environment
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 is not a task that can be achieved by a single person nor by the local
government
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 but rather by the hard and consistent
work
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 put in by each of them .
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