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Many today feel that attention spans are becoming shorter due to the prevalence of social media. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#attention #prevalence #media
It is believed that most
of
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the
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people have lost their concentration
skill
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due to
 the media.
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 essay totally agrees with
this
 statement, because people cannot use their time wisely and they are getting used to
watch
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 only short
videos
.
Firstly
, what individuals do because of the internet, is
procrastination
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of
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 their main duties which requires
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good attention.
For instance
,
mostly
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 students after school prefer sitting on social
medias
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 like Instagram, YouTube or TikTok and chatting with friends, watching hundreds of
videos
 which take
plethora
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 of time.
Thus
, they delay their school assignments and get distracted. The main reason for
that is
, many do not set time management or plan their day and follow it. It may have some detrimental
consequents
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such
 as poor performance at work or school.
Secondly
, long
videos
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 become something irritating and tedious.
Moreover
, for
some
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 it is hard to focus longer than one hour on anything. Even they try to skip some moments on video. Why they tend to watch only short
videos
 is
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media there are just one-two minute recordings are shown,
hence
, people adapted it. Sometimes they watch it
while
 they are doing house chores or cooking, yet they do not mentally pay much attention to it.
To conclude
, from the aforementioned arguments, I am convinced that we are facing more and more disadvantages of social networks like losing the ability
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 concentrate on a particular activity in life. So, we have to deal with it in order to avoid possible negative repercussions
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 and try to prolong the attention span.
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