At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of youth adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, the majority of some countries’ population is in
the
young Correct article usage
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adultadults
age and Correct your spelling
adult adults
people
with older age become the minor group. I think this
situation has advantages for the countries’ growth as young adults
are adaptive and have better
physical condition.
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a better
Firstly
, young adults
adapt easily with
world Change preposition
to
advancementadvancemant
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advancement advancement
Along with
time, technology
becomesbecome
much more Correct your spelling
becomes become
powerfulmuch
powerful and Correct your spelling
powerful much
effectivenesseffectivity
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effectiveness effectivity
increase
because of it. To survive in Fix the agreement mistake
increases
this
worldword
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world word
people
are encouragedencourage
to Correct your spelling
encouraged encouraged
work
along with
it thus
they need to have ability
to understand Change the article
the ability
the
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apply
technology
. Young adults
can learn and explore the current technology
easily and rapidly compare to older people
hence
productivity will increase. Moreover
, young adults
also
can invent another technology
which contribute
to world improvement. Change the verb form
contributes
For example
, young adults
can operate excel
expertly so Correct your spelling
Excel
tehy
increase effectivity in Correct your spelling
they
collect
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collecting
process
some Wrong verb form
processing
datas
.
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data
Secondly
, young adults
have better physical condition compare
to older Wrong verb form
compared
people
which help
them become more energetic at Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
work
. Young adults
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adult
people
are in the stage where their bodies are in the peak of development. Obviously
it has Add a comma
,Obviously
giant
impact on their Add an article
a giant
work
since body
is the main tool. Add an article
the body
For instance
, some kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
work
have
high mobility which Change the verb form
has
lead
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leads
people
to move from one place to another. Moreover
, there are
some Change the verb form
is
work
that need
powerful Change the verb form
needs
worker
since they need to lift up heavy Fix the agreement mistake
workers
good
.
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goods
To sum up
, countries with big population of young adults
can gain more productivity as they have ability
to adapt easily Change the article
the ability
particularly
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,particularly
on
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to
technology
and better physical condition
which help them do any Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
work
energeticly
.Correct your spelling
energetically
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...
