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the table shows the average time and money spent at different types of restaurants

the table shows the average time and money spent at different types of restaurants
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The table shows how much
time
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 and money customers spend on average at
three
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 different types of restaurants. The cost of a meal in each of the
three
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 dining rooms is significantly different. there is
also
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 a significant difference in spending
time
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 eating. the average of both
lunch
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 and banquet is very different in each of the
three
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 types of dining room. A fast-food customer spends on average $4.50 for
lunch
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 and $5.00 for
dinner
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. at a cafeteria,
on the other hand
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, the average cost for
three
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 meals is $7.00 and costs more than twice as much as a fast-food
lunch
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, and
dinner
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 is more than
three
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 times as expensive. Following the consumers at each of these restaurants
also
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 spend different amounts of
time
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 eating.
Lunch
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 and
dinner
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 at a fast-food restaurant take only 20
minutes
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 on average. At the
,
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cafeteria they take 30
minutes
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 and 45
minutes
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, respectively. Meanwhile, a customer at a sit-down restaurant spends 45
minutes
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 eating
lunch
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 and 60
minutes
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 eating
dinner
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. In general, customers who spend less on food
also
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 spend less
time
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 eating,
while
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 those who spend more money on restaurant meals
also
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 spend more
time
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 eating them.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, three, lunch, dinner, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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