The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The Line Graph illustrates the number of travellers
visited
Correct pronoun usage
who visited
the
certain Correct article usage
a
Correct your spelling
Caribbean
carribean
island between the seven Correct your spelling
caribbean
years
of span of 2010-2017
Overall
the graph shows a significant increase and decrease in the numbers
of travellers visited on Fix the agreement mistake
number
cruse
ships and on Correct your spelling
cruise
island
.
Add an article
the island
According to
the graph
around one-fourth Add a comma
,graph
million
tourist
stayed on Change to a plural noun
tourists
cruised
Add an article
the cruised
ship
in 2010, Fix the agreement mistake
ships
flucating
over the two Correct your spelling
fluctuating
floating
years
, and rose gradually over the 5 years
of span and reach at
3.5 Remove the preposition
apply
million
tourist
. Change to a plural noun
tourists
However
, The Travellers stayed
on the island was 0.75 Correct pronoun usage
who stayed
million
in 2010 stayed remain plateau till 2011, Rose
gradually and flat place over the Correct pronoun usage
It Rose
four year
of Add a hyphen
four-year
time
period and Add an article
the time
then
flucatuating
over the two Correct your spelling
fluctuating
years
of span and reached at
1.5 Change preposition
apply
million
in 2017.
Looking into the second data, the total number of visitors stayed in both destination
is 1 Fix the agreement mistake
destinations
million
and rose steeply over the 5.5 years
of time
period, Add an article
the time
a time
and
reflecting the plateaus till 2017 and Correct word choice
apply
maintain
the record of 3.5 Wrong verb form
maintaining
million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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