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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The Line Graph illustrates the number of travellers
visited
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who visited
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the
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a
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 certain
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Caribbean
carribean
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caribbean
 island between the seven
years
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 of span of 2010-2017
Overall
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 the graph shows a significant increase and decrease in the
numbers
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number
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 of travellers visited on
cruse
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cruise
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 ships and on
island
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the island
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.
According to
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 the
graph
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,graph
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 around one-fourth
million
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tourist
Change to a plural noun
tourists
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 stayed on
cruised
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the cruised
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ship
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ships
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 in 2010,
flucating
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fluctuating
floating
 over the two
years
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, and rose gradually over the 5
years
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 of span and reach
at
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apply
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3.5
million
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tourist
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tourists
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.
However
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, The Travellers
stayed
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who stayed
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 on the island was 0.75
million
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 in 2010 stayed remain plateau till 2011,
Rose
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It Rose
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 gradually and flat place over the
four year
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four-year
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 of
time
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the time
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 period and
then
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flucatuating
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fluctuating
 over the two
years
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 of span and reached
at
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apply
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1.5
million
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 in 2017. Looking into the second data, the total number of visitors stayed in both
destination
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destinations
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 is 1
million
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 and rose steeply over the 5.5
years
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 of
time
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the time
a time
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 period,
and
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apply
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reflecting the plateaus till 2017 and
maintain
Wrong verb form
maintaining
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 the record of 3.5
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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