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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast foods for the main meals? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Fast
foods
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 have been in controversy since it was invented. They are considered
as
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 blessing by almost all busy
people
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 around the world. Some
people
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 think that these are rubbish
foods
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. But in my opinion,
this
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 is a
food
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 that gives life to
people
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 just like
home cooked
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home-cooked
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 meals. Fast
food
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 has been
in
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 the scene for more than a century. It has been a blockbuster
to
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 every country in the world. There are various reasons why
people
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 are patronising it.
Firstly
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, it provides
meal
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meals
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 in less than 15 minutes.
People
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 do not need to wait for hours just to have a meal.
For instance
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, office workers tend to purchase their meal during breaks from fast
foods
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 as it has less waiting time and they could even use some of the excess time on other things.
Secondly
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, it is convenient
to
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 everyone. Fast
foods
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 are on
each
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every corner of the street. They do not need to travel far just to avail a meal.
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, it is cheap. During
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this
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these
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 recession times,
people
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 are aiming towards eating cheap meals in order for them to use the money
to
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for
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 other important things like medicine or
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education.
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, there are
few
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a few
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 drawbacks
with
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to
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 fast
food
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. Based
from
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 research, they are very unhealthy to consume. Fast
foods
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 are said to be tastier because of all the oil and other cheap ingredients being used.
Also
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, it is one of the
cause
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 of the rise of malnutrition in the world.
People
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 think that eating
in
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fast
food
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 is like having a proper meal.
According to
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 studies, regular consumers of fast
food
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 are more prone to cancer than those who are eating
home cooked
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home-cooked
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 meals.
To conclude
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, fast
food
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 is a big help to everyone
especially
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 to places that
has
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have
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fast paced
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fast-paced
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 lifestyle. They provide convenience and
helps
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help
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 them to save money that they could use for some other things. The advantages of it greatly
outweighs
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 the
disadvadvantages
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disadvantages
. But, it should only be consumed in moderation.

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