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Some people feel that in order to improve the quality of our education we should encourage high school students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Others feel that it will cause the loss of respect and discipline in the classroom

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It is stated by some people that pushing the learning wheel to the top depends on
students
' assessment
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 their instructors,
whereas
 others emphasize that respecting teachers is a priority
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 the teaching-learning process.I firmly approbate the latter camp. First and foremost,criticising lecturers will lead to various problems
such
 as messy classes and a lack of respect.
That is
 to say, if
students
 do not admire and honour their monitor,they will not be able to learn any subject
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them.
For example
, learners in upper grades can not learn math,science and artificial
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intelligence
 at school if the
teacher
 does not have
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class management
 or he/she can not make
students
 listen or follow up with the lesson.
Thus
, accepting rude comments will lead to out-of-control
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tuition
as well as
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deportation
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 image of
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.
On the other hand
,
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evaluating
 teachers could be one aspect of teaching ,yet it should be taken as a holistic evaluation
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 as
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 parents,administration and
students
.
Moreover
,
this
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evaluation
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 should be conducted professionally and without any bias
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criteria
criterion
.The most
impotant
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important
 point is to deal with
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criticism
 as a factor to
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motivate
teacher
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 not as a
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 of
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and
humilitation
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humiliation
.
For instance
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 may attend demo-presentation and
scofold
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scaffold
scold
 teachers to overcome any difficulty or deficiency tactfully and kindly as well, focusing on positive features first.
Thus
 the
teacher
 will feel comfortable,
consequently
,
this
 will lead to more productivity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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