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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While
 some people argue that animal experimentation, which is commonly undertaken for medical and product safety trials, should be prohibited
due to
 ethical
concerns
, others support that suffering can be justified for
human’s
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benefits
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.
This
 essay attempts to shed light on both sides before concluding that I am in favour of the latter notion. On the one hand, animal testing could be morally wrong to a certain extent. An example of the practice is that animals
such
 as mice or monkeys would be made ill before measuring the effectiveness of tested drugs.
Such
 pain is not accepted among animal activists when they argue that humans have no
rights
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 to subject animals to
this
 trauma.
Moreover
, some alternative research methods have been developed
such
 as
vitro
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 testing or computer modelling. These methods could have more advantages than animal testing in the sense of accuracy
,
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 because they could be tailored to the specific needs of human biology.
On the other hand
, supporters of the mentioned practice are convinced that
advantages
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 could outweigh the
concerns
. Most importantly, it is true that there are alternative methods of research to replace animal testing, yet they are not reliable.
For example
, some alternatives
such
 as computer modelling or cell cultures can not simulate the effects of drugs on brains which in turn could not be applied to humans.
Additionally
, despite some ethical
concerns
 for animals, a certain amount of suffering can be justified if human lives are saved. Thanks to animal experiments, there are uncountable successful developments in the medical field.
Such
 success can be named penicillin or studies of causes and effects of treatments for cancer or heart attacks. In conclusion,
while
 there are ethical
concerns
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 animal testing, I would personally support a controlled amount of experimentation for critical medical research until new effective alternatives have been developed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethics
  • Morality
  • Vivisection
  • In vivo testing
  • Cruelty-free
  • Animal welfare
  • Biomedical research
  • Toxicology
  • Sentience
  • Compassionate
  • Humane
  • Speciesism
  • In vitro
  • Alternative methods
  • Pharmacology
  • Clinical trials
  • Bioethics
  • Animal rights
  • Pain threshold
  • Efficacy
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