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The bar chart illustrated the amount of houses constructed yearly in two cities ( Derby and Nottingham) during the period from 2000 to 2009.

The bar chart illustrated the amount of houses constructed yearly in two cities ( Derby and Nottingham) during the period from 2000 to 2009.
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The given bar chart illustrates the information of
residentials
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 construction per annum in two different cities which are Derby and Nottingham, from 2000 to 2009.
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, it can be clearly seen that the
number
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 of
houses
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 in Darby had
upward
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 trend,
while
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 Nottingham
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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. 2009 was the highest
number
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 of
houses
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 built for both
of
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apply
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years
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. Looking at the details, as regards for Derby, started at just under 50 home
building
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buildings
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 in 2000 and
then
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 it
was remain
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remained
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 stable in the next year.
Then
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, the
number
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 of
houses
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construction
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constructed
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 was the same at approximately 120
houses
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 for the next four
years
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 starting
2003
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in 2003
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.
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, there was
significant
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a significant
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 increase in the rest of the
years
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 and reached
peak
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a peak
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 at just below 350.
As
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With
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 respect to Nottingham, 50
houses
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was
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were
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 built in 2000 and
this
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number
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 was higher than Derby's
houses
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 in the same year. There was a fluctuation
number
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 for the next five
years
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 and the home construction was recorded to around 80
houses
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 before falling to around 2 in 2006.
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, the highest recorded of
home
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homes
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 built was 250
houses
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in
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at
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 the end of the recorded year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, houses, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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