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The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what do you agree or disagree?

#children #team #sports #school
In the present
cooperation
 is
most
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essential for people to
socialization
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.Some teachers and parents believe that team
sports
 are the best way to cooperate
their
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with their
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children
. There is an argument about
this
 and in my
opinion
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I'm not agree
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I do not agree
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 with that and I will explain my reasons for it in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one
hand
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 every child can't play
the
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sports
as
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same
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 strength. As
a
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 example physically and mentally challenged
children
 can't reach the same goal as strong
children
. Because of that they may
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 tired and
they
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may
be get
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 angry and
disappointment
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. So in case of
this
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 they may be isolated from the others. Even some strong
children
 don't like to join any
sports
 because
of
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they target only their exams and academic
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
On the other hand
 there
ara
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lot
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 of effective ways to achieve
the
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cooperation
 not only
team
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through team
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sports
. Teachers can improve
being
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cooperation
 among
children
by
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through
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 group projects ,language competitions,dharma Dana campaigns,scout camping,concert,educational trips etc.
Due to
this
children
 with different abilities can appear
through
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 their preferred ways and from that they can get new experiences and knowledge
also
.
As a result
 of
this
children
 realize at an early age that there are people with different abilities in
the
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society and how to interact with them. In
conclusion
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According to
above
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 facts it appears that team
sports
is
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 not the best way to develop
cooperation
 in school. It is only one way and there are many more progressive ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • values
  • applied
  • aspects
  • belonging
  • camaraderie
  • participating
  • essential
  • social skills
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