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By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some countries still punish
offenders
 with the
death
penalty
 to reduce the crime rate.
However
, it is not
the
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 suitable outcome for sentencing.
This
 essay totally agrees with that statement. I believe that criminal
offenders
 should not be punished with the
death
penalty
, as the
death
penalty
 is considered an inhumane
act
 and it is irreversible. Countries should not punish criminals through the
death
penalty
 as it is considered as one of the inhuman
acts
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. Using electrical chairs or any type of punishment to punish criminal
offenders
 leading to
death
 is not the right option, as it violates the human rights
act
, and they can receive lots of backlash from the public.
For instance
, America is a country that has a huge stance on equal human rights,
,
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however
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 the country still implementing
death
 row, which cause stirred up public opinion, and people are questioning whether America really respects human rights. With the
death
penalty
, it is irreversible.
This
 means that if there is new evidence that proves not guilty or misleading occurs in the sentences, the
death
penalty
 cannot be undone, as the murderer has passed away.
For instance
, misleading sentences are unavoidable in the legal system, as America is named as one of the countries that have the highest error rate of twenty-five per cent. So, if there is new evidence that proved that the criminal is not guilty, the
act
 cannot be undone, as the person has already passed away from the punishment. In conclusion, criminal
offenders
 should not be punished with the
death
penalty
 despite the severity of their crime rate because
this
act
 violates the Human right
act
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 and it cannot be undone if there is new evidence or a mistake during sentencing.
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