the graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004

the graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004
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The line graph illustrates the cost of
bananas
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per kilogram in four countries from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, the expense of
bananas
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in Japan, France, and
Germany
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fluctuated noticeably
while
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the charge
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that fruit in the
USA
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was pretty steady but with a slight decrease. Looking at the graph closely, the initial
price
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of
bananas
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in Japan was approximately 1.80$ and experienced a massive increase to nearly 3$ in the following year.
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, in 1996, it declined in its
price
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significantly to just 2$ before undergoing a slight decrease in 2001 and experiencing a noticeable increase in 2003 to 2.50$. Regarding France, it had a steady
price
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of
bananas
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till 1998 (1.50$ per kg), before falling to about 1.30$ in 2000. From 2000 to 2004, there were remarkable fluctuations
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but ended up with relatively the same as the initial
price
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of over 1.50$. Compared to Japan and France, the cost of
bananas
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in the
USA
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and
Germany
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did not experience massive changes. The initial prices of
bananas
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in the
USA
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and
Germany
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were about 1.50$ and 0.80$, respectively. The
price
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fluctuated slightly in the
USA
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between 1994 and 1998, reaching over 1$ in 1998.
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, it slightly decreased afterwards and remained steady until 2004 at approximately $1.20.
Germany
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experienced ups and downs in the
price
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until 2002, reaching about $1.30, and
then
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remained steady until 2004 at that cost.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, germany, usa, price with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • price fluctuation
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant rise/drop
  • trend
  • noticeable
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • highest
  • lowest
  • throughout the period
  • stable
  • volatile
  • potential reasons
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