Today, there are more images of disasters and violence in the media. What are the causes and what are your solutions?

In the past, people received
news
updates only by listening to the radio and reading
newspaper
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.
This
is no longer the case.
Due to
advanced communication technologies, individuals nowadays are surrounded by all kinds of
media
at all times. They are being kept informed about what is happening worldwide almost simultaneously by thousands of websites, like TV
news
, radio programs, and even mobile phone text messages.
As a result
, bad
news
now has hi-tech wings and is being heard more often than ever before. Another important reason leading to
this
phenomenon is that the ultimate goal of
media
companies is to seek maximum profits. Since bad
news
is exaggerated for the sake of shock value,
media
companies of course make up much of it to boost sales
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and attract more advertisement. So we see
24-hours
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24-hour
, non-stop
news
report
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reports
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of
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crashes, earthquakes, tsunamis, and violence. In order to solve
this
problem,
in other words
, to encourage the
media
to provide more balanced coverage to the public, government intervention and guidance can make a difference. More importantly,
media
networks should not only function as a business
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but take a larger social responsibility.
Besides
, the citizens should learn to live optimistically and actively. After all, it is we, the viewers, who decide what we like to watch, read, and pay attention to.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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