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Some people think the government should subsidise fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Others argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidise
  • affordable
  • public health
  • healthcare costs
  • diet-related illnesses
  • agricultural sector
  • taxing
  • discourages
  • consumption
  • funds
  • redirected
  • health programs
  • educational campaigns
  • balanced approach
  • comprehensive solution
  • financial deterrent
  • societal shift
  • eating habits
  • effective
  • drawbacks
  • economic impact
  • low-income individuals
  • consumer behavior
  • administrative feasibility
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