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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.
This
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 bar chart depicts how much time teachers spend at all levels of school in four countries in 2001. It is clear from the graph that the
USA
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 have the highest percentage in the three levels.
According to
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 what is shown Japan had a constant increase between the levels with about 50
hours
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 extra per level, and the lowest one was the primary, but the highest was the upper secondary.
Moreover
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, Iceland has more than 900
hours
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 in the upper secondary with more than 300
hours
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 in both primary and upper secondary schools.
Next,
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the
USA
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, has the highest rate for each level with about 750
hours
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 for the primary, and
that is
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 more than upper secondary in Japan, but the highest number of
hours
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 was the upper secondary in the
USA
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 with about 1100
hours
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 and that
equal
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 to about the primary and the lower secondary school in Iceland.
To sum up
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, we could say that the
USA
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 teachers spend so much time learning, but Japan has the lowest rate of
hours
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts, time allocation, primary education, lower secondary level, upper secondary level
  • teacher workload, classroom hours, non-teaching duties
  • educational system, comparative analysis, pedagogic practices
  • instructional time, professional development, teacher's responsibilities
  • discrepancies, workload distribution, teaching hours
  • statistical data, time management, educators, pedagogues
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