Government in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on food and beverages with high level of sugar some think that these taxes are a good idea while other disagree. Discuss both you and give your opinion?

Special taxes
has
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have
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been imposed on
food
items with
higher
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a higher
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concentration of
sugar
by the government in most parts of the world lately. Some
people
beleive
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believe
that introducing more charges on
such
food
is a better way to deal with emerging problems of
health
such
as obesity,
whereas
others contradict
this
.
This
essay will explain both views in detail
alongwith
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along with
my opinion. Those who are in favour of high duty on sugary goods,
belives
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believes
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that sucrose has devastating effects on
health
. Drinking or eating
such
products can make
people
more obese and could result in serious diseases
such
as
diabieties
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diabetes
.
Moreover
, sugary drinks are
addictice
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addictive
. Once
people
get used to it , it becomes hard for them to say to
such
products. Imposing higher charges on sucrose
item
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items
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could be a better way as
people
will think twice before buying. Others, who oppose
tax
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a tax
the tax
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on
food
,
believes
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believe
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that there are other ways to deal with the problem,
self-awareness
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and self-awareness
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is one of them.
Instead
of charging more, the government should spend money on awareness campaigns to educate
people
about
deteriorating
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the deteriorating
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effects of eating
sweet
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sweets
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on
health
and should promote alternate sources of
sugar
such
as
splenda
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Splenda
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. As more and more
people
will be aware of
significance
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the significance
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of having
healthy
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a healthy
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life, the consumption of
sugar concentrated
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sugar-concentrated
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products is more likely to decrease. I
also
, agree with
this
point of view.
To conclude
, putting more taxes on
food
items with higher
concentration
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concentrations
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of
sugar
could be a solution but there are other better ways to halt the consumption of
sugar
such
as by shedding light on
importance
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the importance
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of
health
by running campaigns or other sources.
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