Some people feel that playing computer games has a negative impact on children's health and social skills. Others say that it has a positive impact. Discuss both views.

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Some say that playing video
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has more advantages,
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others, including myself, would argue that
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games
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have a bad influence on
people
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`s health and community skills.
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some
people
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believe that video
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will improve
children
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`s reactions, not playing
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at all will improve
children
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`s lives in the future. On the one hand, the young generation has to have
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when they have time.
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, parents should do their best to provide for their
children
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when they are young.
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, in the future
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will become more responsible and will provide for their parents with their hard times.
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, have to
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at their age does not mean buying them a
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or phone and giving them permission to play. Because it can lead to sedentary life or obesity.
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, they will be so dependent on
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games
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that they will lose the social skills which are so important in
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world.
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,
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have to have a balance between self-improvement and
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.
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, without self-improving
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will not develop
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to
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, without
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life will seem boring.
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fun
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does not mean playing
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, it means going with your friends somewhere and having a conversation with them.
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,
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will lose their interest in
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. I believe that in
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way teenagers or
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will change their point of view on
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world. In conclusion, I think that parents have to give limit their
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to one hour a day of playing
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games
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for cleaning dishes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Obesity
  • Social Isolation
  • Aggression
  • Academic performance
  • Gaming addiction
  • Cognitive skills
  • Problem-solving
  • Stress relief
  • Cultural awareness
  • Social interaction
  • Multitasking
  • Virtual worlds
  • Hand-eye coordination
  • Teamwork
  • Digital literacy
  • Innovative technology
  • E-sports
  • Moderation
  • Parental supervision
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