Some people feel that playing computer games has a negative impact on children's health and social skills. Others say that it has a positive impact. Discuss both views.

Some say that playing video
games
has more advantages,
while
others, including myself, would argue that
computer
games
have a bad influence on
people
`s health and community skills.
Although
some
people
believe that video
games
will improve
children
`s reactions, not playing
games
at all will improve
children
`s lives in the future. On the one hand, the young generation has to have
fun
when they have time.
Furthermore
, parents should do their best to provide for their
children
when they are young.
Consequently
, in the future
children
will become more responsible and will provide for their parents with their hard times.
However
, have to
fun
at their age does not mean buying them a
computer
or phone and giving them permission to play. Because it can lead to sedentary life or obesity.
In addition
, they will be so dependent on
computer
games
that they will lose the social skills which are so important in
this
world.
On the other hand
,
people
have to have a balance between self-improvement and
fun
.
For example
, without self-improving
people
will not develop
in addition
to
fun
, without
fun
life will seem boring.
However
fun
does not mean playing
games
, it means going with your friends somewhere and having a conversation with them.
Consequently
,
people
will lose their interest in
games
. I believe that in
this
way teenagers or
children
will change their point of view on
this
world. In conclusion, I think that parents have to give limit their
children
to one hour a day of playing
computer
games
for cleaning dishes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Obesity
  • Social Isolation
  • Aggression
  • Academic performance
  • Gaming addiction
  • Cognitive skills
  • Problem-solving
  • Stress relief
  • Cultural awareness
  • Social interaction
  • Multitasking
  • Virtual worlds
  • Hand-eye coordination
  • Teamwork
  • Digital literacy
  • Innovative technology
  • E-sports
  • Moderation
  • Parental supervision
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