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Some people believe that humans should be able to use animals for their own benefit, while others argue that the rights of animals should be protected. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #humans #animals #benefit #rights
It has been believed that
animals
 are one of
labour
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the labour
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 factors in old ages and modern days,
human
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humans
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 used to utilize
this
 as an essential element of
producation
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production
.
However
, humans believe that they always have the right to use it for their purposes,
some
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and some
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 voices are
claming
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claiming
 that these creatures should be protected by laws. In the following
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paragraphs
paragraphes
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,paragraphes
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 I will clarify both views with relevant examples.
To begin
 with, the first point of view that says
animals
 should be used by mankind and serve their own benefits in any aspect they need.
Firstly
, in
farming
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the farming
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 field
animals
 have crucial importance in
producation
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production
, it
contributs
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contributes
in
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to
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 almost all farming processes,
besides
 other industries .
For example
, we use their meat and wool as long as their contribution
in
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to
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 some medical purposes like science
experments
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experiments
.
Secondly
, they might be used in our homes,
for instance
, dogs are used in
gaurd
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guard
 and safety services.
Finally
 some folk like to raise pets and consider them family members.
On the other hand
, those who argue that
animals
 should be protected from
humans
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human
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 misusing, they claim that
thay
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they
 might be tutored or beaten,
moreover
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,moreover
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 the excessive
works
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work
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 of
animals
 could be a potential reason for their death.
Hence
, the law must
interfer
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interfere
 to save
these creature
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this creature
these creatures
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 from
such
 detrimental uses.
For example
, there were some public
campaings
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campaigns
campaign
 in Egypt calling for
animals
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animal
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 protection and
as a result
 of
this
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,this
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 the Egyptian government issued laws to punish those who insult street
animals
. In conclusion, these two points of view have a sense of logic with regard to
animals
,
however
, I support the voices that call for giving
a
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apply
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suitable treatment and protection for
animals
.
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