Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources, such as forests, animals, or clean water. Why is this happening? What could be done to prevent it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

the earth has been growing and
along with
it is losing necessary natural resources including animal or fresh water. One of the most important are
forests
. The vital of
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forests
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life ,
forests
has been created fresh air that decreases greenhouse gas, more than
,
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if we do not have
tree
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, we won’t inspire because we need oxygen
to
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tree
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,
on the other hand
, one reason we need to protect the
tree
is that
also
reduce the effect of the water on the soil.
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,
forests
located
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central
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save the billion of VN Dong by
desistant
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resistant
distant
flood
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and heavy rain.
The
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first,
tree
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decrease energy by
reduce
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the environment
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environment
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temperature, so we don’t use air conditioning.
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vegetation has been protected from
clear cutting
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. A government need to actions that
works
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to protect
forests
. As can be
seen
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tree
is an extremely important
resources
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, we need to know how to rationally use,
perent
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parent
adverse effects affecting them
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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