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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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All states in Canada had experienced an increase in non-resident students from 2001 to 2006, but British Columbia had experienced more than twice of students in 2006 than they had in 2001. By 2001,the highest number of graduates- nearly 7% had been located in New Brunswick,
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 the least amount had been in Ontario - far fewer than 5%. By 2006, the highest number still had been in New Brunswick with more than 10%,
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 to the lowest percentage in Ontario ,much less than in New Brunswick -practically 6%. By 2006, almost the same
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 had Nova Scotia and Quebec - more than 5%. In both years Manitoba and Newfoundland with Labrador had equal proportions - in 2002 less than 5% ,
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 2006 much more than 5%.
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 , all Canadian cities had growth in
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the percentage
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 of students, some of
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the graphs
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 increased significantly and
other
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others
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 ones slightly.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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