Some people believe the media should be allowed to publish private information about people, while others are against it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that the media has the right to broadcast the personal information of an individual,
while
others say that it is not right and should be abolished.
While
a press has the freedom to inform its citizen regarding every issue, I believe that
this
may be against human rights acts. On the one hand, there are many journalists who published several pieces of articles to inform people
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their actions. Since people always
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an
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regarding their everyday life,
this
keep
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those person
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at bay, and
help
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them not to act recklessly, or
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their power to violate others.
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, since everyone has
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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