Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful, but they are also likely to suffer from negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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the
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economically develop. But I agree they will
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suffer from negative social consequences. The economically successful
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is great for the
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from
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country
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the
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ratio will be affected
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the long working
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work
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a boy /
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most countries population has effect from these
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people
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health will reduce
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before, like
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they
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suddenly die from
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heart ill. In my
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, Labour’s health and the population
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economically develop
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is not good
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. In fact,
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effective
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work
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better than
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working
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, from a research report, the
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quality from
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is better than
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work
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time
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bad emotions when they
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time
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. And they will a little reject the
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a health rules
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for jobs that will
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this
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. Like reduce the
work
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and make some bonus activities for the Labour. And most
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. Economically
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that
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is important for the
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we must attention
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people
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personal
time
, the population
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is
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important for the
country
. I hope we can solve
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long average working
time
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our society.
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  • Average working time
  • Economically successful
  • Negative social consequences
  • Employee burnout
  • Competitive edge
  • Global markets
  • Consumer spending
  • Productivity
  • Work-life balance
  • Mental health issues
  • Community ties
  • Societal well-being
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