Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful, but they are also likely to suffer from negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Long average working has a general
problem
in these years. Most the
companies think Correct article usage
apply
that is
basic
element for their worker. from the world Add an article
the basic
a basic
economic
, Replace the word
economy
that
is very useful Correct pronoun usage
which
of
the Change preposition
for
country
economically develop. But I agree they will Change noun form
country's
to
suffer from negative social consequences.
The economically successful Change the verb form
apply
that
is great for the Correct pronoun usage
apply
country
, but it is sacrifice
from Add an article
a sacrifice
people
’s personal time
. And in fact
Add a comma
,fact
country
who
the Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
have a long working time
in generally
. Replace the word
general
For example
, the new born
ratio will be affected Correct your spelling
newborn
from
the long working Change preposition
by
time
. Most people
spend much more time
in
Change preposition
at
work
and they don’t have time
to dating
or Replace the word
date
knowing
a boy / Wrong verb form
know
girl friend
. So they don’t want to married or made a newborn baby. Correct your spelling
girlfriend
Honestly
most countries population has effect from these Add a comma
,Honestly
work
time
. And the
Correct article usage
apply
people
health will reduce Change noun form
people's
than
before, like Change preposition
apply
few
Correct article usage
a few
of
Change preposition
apply
people
they
suddenly die from Correct pronoun usage
who
the
heart ill. In my Correct article usage
apply
views
, Labour’s health and the population Fix the agreement mistake
view
problem
of the country
to exchange the countries
economically develop Change noun form
country's
that
is not good Correct pronoun usage
apply
ideas
.
In fact, Fix the agreement mistake
idea
more high
effective Replace the words
higher
for
Change preposition
apply
work
much
better than Add a missing verb
is much
long
working Correct article usage
a long
time
, from a research report, the work
results
quality from Add the preposition
inresults
fromresults
people
high effective work
it
is better than Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
often
Correct pronoun usage
who often
work
long
Change the article
a long
time
. Because all the people
have a
bad emotions when they Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
work
long
Change the article
a long
time
everyday
. And they will a little reject the Replace the word
every day
work
. So in my opinion the company should created
Change the verb form
create
a health rules
for jobs that will Correct the article-noun agreement
health rules
a health rule
be solve
Change the verb form
solve
this
problem
. Like reduce the work
time
and make some bonus activities for the Labour. And most people
will improve their work
effective
.
Economically Change the word
effectively
successful
Replace the word
success
that
is important for the Correct pronoun usage
apply
country
’s development, but at the same time
we must attention the
Change preposition
to the
people
personal Change noun form
people's
time
, the population improves
is Replace the word
improvement
same
important for the Correct article usage
the same
country
. I hope we can solve this
problem
about
long average working Change preposition
of
time
in the
our society.Remove the article
apply
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