Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful, but they are also likely to suffer from negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree
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in these years. Most Use synonyms
the
companies think Correct article usage
apply
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basic
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economy
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that
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which
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for
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country
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country's
to
suffer from negative social consequences.
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apply
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that
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country
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sacrifice
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a sacrifice
people
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time
. And in Use synonyms
fact
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,fact
country
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who
the Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
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time
in Use synonyms
generally
. Replace the word
general
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new born
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newborn
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by
time
. Most Use synonyms
people
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time
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in
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at
work
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time
to Use synonyms
dating
or Replace the word
date
knowing
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know
girl friend
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girlfriend
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,Honestly
work
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time
. And Use synonyms
the
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apply
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people
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people's
than
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apply
few
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a few
of
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apply
people
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they
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who
the
heart ill. In my Correct article usage
apply
views
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view
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country
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countries
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country's
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that
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apply
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.
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idea
more high
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higher
for
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apply
work
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much
better than Add a missing verb
is much
long
working Correct article usage
a long
time
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work
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results
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people
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it
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people
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often
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who often
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long
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a long
time
. Because all the Use synonyms
people
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a
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apply
work
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long
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a long
time
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everyday
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every day
work
. So in my opinion the company should Use synonyms
created
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create
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health rules
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solve
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work
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time
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people
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work
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effective
.
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effectively
successful
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success
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that
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apply
country
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time
we must attention Use synonyms
the
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to the
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people
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people's
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, the population Use synonyms
improves
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improvement
same
important for the Correct article usage
the same
country
. I hope we can solve Use synonyms
this
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problem
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about
long average working Change preposition
of
time
in Use synonyms
the
our society.Remove the article
apply
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