Children today spend a lot of time on playing games and they spend little time on sports. What are the reasons and what should be done to tackle the problem?

Nowadays,
young
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generation uses most of their
time
on
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playing
games
,
while
allocate
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allocating
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little
time
on
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to
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sports. The primary factors for the
aformantioned
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aforementioned
issue are
addictive
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the addictive
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content of
games
and unaccessible
sport
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sports
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facilities
. To tackle
this
issue, control from authorities
is
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should be required.
To begin
with, the first fundamental
reasons
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reason
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why minors are very
engaging
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engaged
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on
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in
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games
is entertaining
fiturs
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features
figures
from video
games
.
This
means that game developers create
an
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attractive content intentionally so players will be
addictive
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addicted
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.
As a result
,
a
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the
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pleasure
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pleasant
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feeling of playing
games
leads
children
to play the
games
continouesly
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continuously
and forget their
time
. The second reason is
unaccessible
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the unaccessible
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sport
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sports
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facilities
in
the
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apply
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rural areas. The limited
of
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sport
center
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centre
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facilities
and far distances are
another
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other
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possible
reason
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reasons
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for
children
to
reluctant
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be reluctant
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doing
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to do
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sports.
For instance
, most of
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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centres are located in the big city so
children
who live in the rural area are having difficulties to go. There are
couple
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a couple
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of possible solutions to tackle the issue.
Children
's caregivers and teachers should control their
play
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playtime
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time
. It means a specific rule should be created for
children
and should be obeyed; adults
also
may give appropriate
consequence
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consequences
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so the rules will run.
Moreover
, another
sollution
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solution
is local governments should build
child friendly
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child-friendly
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sport
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sports
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areas and
facilities
.
For example
,
authoritators
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authorisations
authoritative
can construct parks and playgrounds in
the
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apply
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accessible areas.
To sum up
,
children
use most of their free
time
on video
games
rather than doing sports.
This
is because
a
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games
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games
can be so entertaining
while
sport
is hard to access. The offering solutions are control from the
children
's parents and building several
sport
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sports
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facilties
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facilities
from
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apply
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governments.
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