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Some business prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some government have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree?

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Tendency against smoking has grown
tremondously
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tremendously
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last
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 decades.
While
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 some firms ban
somking
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smoking
 in their locations, other authorities
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prohibited
 smoking in all places.I firmly opine that smoking should be banned in all places
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 its adverse ramification. To commence with, smoking should be banned in
work stations
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 and
puplic
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public
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 it has various serious impacts socially and on
health
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the health
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 aspect.
In other words
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, a sniff of smoke is
capabale
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capable
 to make
people
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 avoid talking because of
bad
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the bad
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breathe
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 smell and black teeth strains.
In addition
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 to that, the high cost of cigarettes is the
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chief
 culprit of conflicts between married
people
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.
Thus
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, It weakens the family bonds
as well as
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wasyting
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wasting
 money on
harmfull
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harmful
 and unnecessary staff
instead
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 of compelling
materails
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materials
.
Aslo
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Also
, smoking is
considred
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considered
 the preponderant factor of
serouis
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serious
 diseases
such
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artherosclerosis
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atherosclerosis
 and cancer not to
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mention
 asthma and
plumunary
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pulmonary
 ailments.
Cosequently
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Consequently
, it is obviously unacceptable regarding health and
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monetary
prioritaries
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priorities
.
As a result
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, many
people
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prohabit
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prohibit
 smoking as
the
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passive
somking
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smoking
 is much more hazardous than active one. So, the drastic effects of smoking
is
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 extended to include the smoker and
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people
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the people
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 around.
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For
 that reason
government
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the government
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 has to impose stringent rules with zero-tolerant against smoking . In a nutshell,smoking should be banned as it has different serious effects on society and health.I
prohabate
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prohibit
 smoking should be banned not only as a practice
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but
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also
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trade
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a trade
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,Saving our society is a priority.
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