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The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011.

The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011.
The table compares twelve different areas in the United Kingdom in terms of the number of people cycling to work in 2001, in 2011
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 the percentage varies.
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 the different zones where there are more of them are "Inner" and "Outer London" , and the two areas that assisted a massive evolution are "Inner London" and "Brighton and Hove". The area where most people cycle to work in 2001 and 2011
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is clearly the British capital
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 the city centre and the outskirts of the city. In 2001 ,they were respectively at 43,494 and 33,836.
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,we can observe a massive evolution between the first years of the 2000s and the second decade in the city centre of the capital and in "Brighton and Hove". Brighton and Hove had a change of 109 per cent , which means two times more , and London had 144 per cent , which is enormous.

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