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The table shows population in 2010 and 2100. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows population in 2010 and 2100. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given tables provide information about how many populations of the top ten countries
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 the world in 2010 and 2100. Units are measured in millions.
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, it can be clearly seen that China was the world’s most populous country in
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year
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 Japan reached its crest size. The projection indicates that the size of
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population
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 could reach a peak in the next 90 years.
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, Brazil’s
population
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 is expected to go to the minimum level
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 the final
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. In terms of the
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population
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 in each country, China had the largest
population
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 with 1341
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 in 2010,
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 it is expected to continue decreasing to 941
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 in 2100.
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, in the initial
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 India’s
population
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 was the second
rank
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 with 1225
million
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 and it is predicted to increase to 1551
million
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 and overtake China in the next 90 years. The USA stood at 1225
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 and was the third
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, and it will rise to 468
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 but stand at the fourth
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 in 2100. Nigeria was in the seventh
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 with 158
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 in the beginning
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,
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 experience a dramatic rise to 730
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 which is reach the third
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 in the end
year
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.
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, in 2010, the remaining country started from the fourth until the tenth positions have a
population
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 below 300
million
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 with Japan being the smallest
population
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, which accounted for 127
million
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.
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, in the next 90 years, the
population
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 in the fourth
rank
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 until the tenth position is expected to experience an increase below 500
million
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 and Brazil have the lowest
population
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 which is 177
million
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. Pakistan stands at the same
rank
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 which is in the sixth position, with an increasing
population
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 from 174
million
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 to 261
million
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, population, million, rank with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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