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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Space
 exploration has become significantly important within the
last
 century.
Although
 some
people
 argue that it might be more beneficial to use
this
 money for more necessary purposes. I completely agree with the given opinion, since it is more important to fund the social
services
 of a country,especially if a country does not belong to developed ones. Rocket and satellite construction and training of astronauts require billions of pounds of investment.
Instead
,
this
 money could be used for funding health
services
 , which is more beneficial for both current and future generations. Elderly
people
, for ,instance would not benefit from a rocket launched into
space
,
whereas
 free stroke prevention medications might save their lives and increase their quality.
Hence
, there should be a priority on funding public
services
 over
space
 exploration.
Moreover
, poor countries should not waste money on rockets, until they develop economically. Since it is unacceptable for
people
 to die from curable diseases, the government is investing in satellites. Nobody would benefit from
such
 politics and
such
 government might lose the support of citizens.
therefore
 it is vitally important for authorities to distribute funding wisely and prioritise those
services
, which are more necessary for ordinary
people
.
To sum up
 all of the above, in my point of view funding should be distributed carefully,especially if it is a Third World country and social
services
 should always be prioritised over
space
 exploration.
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