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In some countries school arrange work for students without payments so that students get expriences. To what extend is it benificial for the students as well as the company or institutions.

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 schools are the most modern and own a number of facilities to teach
students
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 as these schools give opportunities
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students
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for students
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expriences
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experiences
experience
 by working without
payments
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 when
students
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 are studying at school. There may be a number of
adventages
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advantages
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Evrybody
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Everybody
 knows that young pupils want to study at modern education centres
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 have great facilities and learn
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 teachers who have high
qualifacations
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qualifications
qualification
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, at like
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 schools include many great opportunities.
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 when
students
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 are studying at school teachers help them to get
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expriences
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experiences
experience
 by working but they
work
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 and get
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expriences
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experiences
experience
however
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students
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 do not get
payment
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 for
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work
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that is
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 done.
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,
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help
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students
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 to their next life namely
future
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jon
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 or
future
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 life.
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, when
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reliesed
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realised
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about
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future
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job
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, maybe they will change their decision about
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 because
of
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at that time all of them
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knew
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everyting
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everything
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job
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, their
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 will increase about their way.
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hand
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students
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work
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 without payments for
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only
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expriences
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experiences
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interesting
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to
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 or
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 because must pay money for
everyting
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everything
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evry
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every
job
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addition
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pulils
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pupils
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 and by
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this
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depression
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for
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 action.
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 one of the
students
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 get
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job
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a job
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for
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 get
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expriences
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experiences
experience
 without
payments
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 but at that time student's
interesting
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 and view
about
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work
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 will die because of difficulties at
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. Working unpayments does not help
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 to get
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expriences
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experiences
experience
. To
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 up, modern
schoos
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schools
school
 always want to
studets
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students
 will be good in their
future
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 life or
job
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.
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Thus
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work
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unpayment
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nonpayment
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expriences
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experiences
 have
benificials
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beneficial
 but there are some drawbacks for
students
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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