Social media helps people to keep in touch with friends and stay on top of news and events. Do you think the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? topic in blood?

Second paragraph: Disadvantages Despite of those advantages
this
media
has some disadvantages that make us to control the bad
effects
of it to our healthy or our life style.
According to
recently reaserches: child and teenagers that use these applications, can't focus easily on their lessons or important goals of their life and it is hurmful for them. The children and juveniles who spend more time in
this
spases, during the time, became more anxious ,پرخاشگر, and more alone rather than another child of that age group. The students who spend many times of a day with
this
media
, usually were faced with morality difficulties in their character what effect their feathers. Some of them were addicted to social
media
or maybe learned some things that was not suitable for their age. So it can hurt their mental or national rythem of their growth.
Thus
some of the scientists, psycologysts, teachers teorisians, parents and tuitters of kindergardens believe that
this
space and these systems are hurmful for some low age persons, and most of all for students. And it
effects
directly on children growth and it can change the national pattern of high quality of their night sleep and daily focus. At least: though there are some bad factores in use of
this
space and social
media
, but it is very useful in these days and we can mention thousands and thousands good things that it presents to us .It
effects
very deeply on human life, science and knowlages. And we can control bad faces of
this
to آسیب پذیر persons.
For example
some parents teachers, twitters and etc who has responsibility for children and juveniles, must to limit use of social
media
for them until they can keep feature generations from bad
effects
of that.
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