In several parts of the world, humans live near protected areas that preserve and protect wildlife. what problems could this situation cause? what solutions you can suggest?

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is one of their habitats. Gradually, the naturalness of nature will run out.
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caring about the habitats in order to peoples can
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of protected areas towards people
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taking care of each other and
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humans, animals, and plants can have good
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and benefits. damage of surrounding nature can be done anytime by humans without the consequences but it is not really done because the laws of the
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with a heavy reward. If we can take care consciously, maybe we can participate in saving our world from detriment.
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