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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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The bar chart below illustrates some changes in the percentage of
people
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 who were born in
Australia
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 and who were born outside of
Australia
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 living in urban,rural and towns between 1995 and 2010.
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,The bar chart shows the number of
people
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 who were born in
Australia
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 and who were born outside of
Australia
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 so much more than others from 1995 to 2010,and the bar chart describes that these
people
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 were born in
cities
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(with brown colour). The
people
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 who were born in Australian
cities
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 was exactly 50, the town was 20(with light green colour) and rural areas were 30(with blue colour),and the
people
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 who were born outside of Australian,
cities
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 increased from 40 to 60
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 the town was a decrease from 20 to 10 and rural areas
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 raise from 30 to 40 in the year of 1995.,
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 in ,2010 only the
people
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 were born in
Australia
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 and out of
Australia
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 dramatically growth from 65 to 80 in
cities
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.Town and rural was dramatically drop.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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