THE MAPS ILLUSTRATE HOW ONE SEASIDE HOLIDAY RESORT CHANGED BETWEEN 1950 AND 1990.
The three maps show what happened in the seaside holiday resort in the
last
40 years: from 1940 to 1990.
Overall
, it can be seen between 1950 and 1970 resort experienced Correct article usage
a gradually
gradually
transformation which Change the word
gradual
was
happened in Unnecessary verb
apply
Add an article
the center
center
and west Change the spelling
centre
side
. In 1990, we can see Fix the agreement mistake
sides
resort
was changed beyond recognition Correct article usage
the resort
compare
to the 1970.
First of all, Change the form of the verb
compared
right
side of the map used to include woodland and old track. In 1970, you can see woodland was Correct article usage
the right
turn
into Wrong verb form
turned
caravan
park and Add an article
the caravan
a caravan
track
Correct article usage
the track
also
was changed to road
which is wider than Add an article
the road
a road
primary
. Villas were taken the place of beach huts.
Now turn to 1990 when the city witnessed main constructions. We can see several buildings which are new Correct article usage
the primary
for
Change preposition
to
this
place. First
one is landscaped gardens which Correct article usage
The first
were
used to be sand dunes. Unnecessary verb
apply
Second
one would be Change the article
The second
surf
school which is located near to Correct article usage
the surf
sea
. Add an article
the sea
Pool
is the Add an article
The pool
last
but not the least construction on this
list. Villas are extended to hotel
despite they were built recently. Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
Caravan
park is altered to Correct article usage
The Caravan
car
park. Correct article usage
a car
Finally
, only road
Correct article usage
the road
remain
unchanged Change the verb form
remains
in
Change preposition
apply
this
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