THE MAPS ILLUSTRATE HOW ONE SEASIDE HOLIDAY RESORT CHANGED BETWEEN 1950 AND 1990.

The three maps show what happened in the seaside holiday resort in the

last

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40 years: from 1940 to 1990.

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, it can be seen between 1950 and 1970 resort experienced

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a gradually

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gradually

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transformation which

was

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apply

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happened in

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the center

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center

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and west

side

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sides

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. In 1990, we can see

resort

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the resort

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was changed beyond recognition

compare

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to the 1970. First of all,

right

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the right

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side of the map used to include woodland and old track. In 1970, you can see woodland was

turn

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turned

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into

caravan

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the caravan

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park and

track

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the track

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also

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was changed to

road

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the road

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which is wider than

primary

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the primary

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. Villas were taken the place of beach huts. Now turn to 1990 when the city witnessed main constructions. We can see several buildings which are new

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this

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place.

First

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one is landscaped gardens which

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used to be sand dunes.

Second

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one would be

surf

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the surf

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school which is located near to

sea

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the sea

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Pool

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is the

last

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but not the least construction on

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list. Villas are extended to

hotel

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despite they were built recently.

Caravan

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The Caravan

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park is altered to

car

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a car

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park.

Finally

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, only

road

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the road

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remain

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remains

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unchanged

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apply

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this

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year.

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Jun 8, 2023

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

183 words

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THE MAPS ILLUSTRATE HOW ONE SEASIDE HOLIDAY RESORT CHANGED BETWEEN 1950 AND 1990.

in the future more people will choose to go on holiday and their own country and not to travel abroad on holiday do you agree or disagree

The restoration of old building in major cities in the world costs enormous government expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, more and more children are being brought up in single parent families. What are the causes of this? What effects can be seen as a result of this?