Cultures around the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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in the world are becoming more comparable. In my opinion from
this
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view
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are mixed
each
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other
due to
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the
improved
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of social media.
This
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maybe
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negative
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impact
of
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culture
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. There are many countries in the world
so
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that
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they have different
cultures
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and traditions. these
cultures
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and traditions have evolved since ancient times and should not
change
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. But representatives of one
culture
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can learn from other
cultures
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through several sources,
such
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as television, travel,
dancing
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. Nowadays mainly teenagers
are
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distribute
trends
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such
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as
musics
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music
kinds of music
pieces of music

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videos
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trends
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and trends

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and others
are
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used as
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trend
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.
That is
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negative
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a negative
the negative

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aspect of
culture
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.
For
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instance
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many people attached social media
instagram
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TikTok YouTube and they are watching
trends
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and
repeat
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them. All nations do not forget their own history and
culture
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because of
holy
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. All nations have their art, music and food abilities to spread it.
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why they
are try
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to spread it to others and they are doing
this
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through
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the internet
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internet
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. Latest searches show that if people forget
borders
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of
culture
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they can dramatically decrease
income
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of
country
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the country
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Disadvantage
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The disadvantage
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of
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which
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is forgotten if people who live in
country
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is have
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own
culture
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used
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to other
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they
change
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their mind
such
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as
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eating
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habits, dancing and religion. Now
due to
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the spread of many
trends
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which is terrible many
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have become more similar In
conclusion
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must not be changed because if
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are changed our
also
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habits
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  • Dissemination
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