Cultures around the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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of social media.
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impact
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. There are many countries in the world
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that
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they have different
cultures
and traditions. these
cultures
and traditions have evolved since ancient times and should not
change
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culture
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cultures
through several sources,
such
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aspect of
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many people attached social media
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TikTok YouTube and they are watching
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them. All nations do not forget their own history and
culture
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. All nations have their art, music and food abilities to spread it.
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to spread it to others and they are doing
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they can dramatically decrease
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of
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.
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is forgotten if people who live in
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which
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own
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to other
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they
change
their mind
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as
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habits, dancing and religion. Now
due to
the spread of many
trends
which is terrible many
cultures
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all
cultures
must not be changed because if
cultures
are changed our
also
habits
change
and extinction #sardor_28
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Homogenization
  • Multinational companies
  • Cultural elements
  • Dissemination
  • Social media platforms
  • International tourism
  • Cultural norms
  • Urbanization
  • Modernization
  • Convergence
  • Cultural blending
  • Cultural diversity
  • Media influence
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