The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following images show a

comparation

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comparison

of two maps of Grange Park, the top one is from 1920 and

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second is an updated version where we can overview the changes that had

occured

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occurred

during the years. Going more into detail with the old map, the

firts atraction

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first attraction

located in the middle just between the Arnold Avenue entrance and Eldon

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street

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second entrance was a fountain. Over passing the fountain, on the left

handed-side

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there was a small stage where musicians use to be located and public seats just in front

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the very end with the walls behind. the seating area

sorounding

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surrounding

the stage was filled with a rose garden in between.

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left section has

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slightly

been changed where

intead

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instead

of a small stage and separate seats it's been repurposed for an

Amphiteatre

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Amphitheatre

for bigger concerts where

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area

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integrated.

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, between the two

entrances

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there is a bigger and squared rose garden

surounded

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surrounded

by seats in each corner. The old fountain it's been changed

for

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a bigger water waterfall located on the right bottom side of the park where in 1920 we use to found a glasshouse. There is

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now a children playing area on the right top corner facing followed by a cafe just next to the entrance

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Arnold Avenue.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

217 words

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renovations
modernize
upgraded
transformed
landscaping
facilities
amenities
preservation
heritage
green spaces
eco-friendly
public space
community impact
historical elements
conservation
recreational areas
urban planning
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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Fully explain your ideas

Today there is a great increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce this problem?

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Many people now have the freedom to work and live anywhere because of advances in communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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