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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following images show a
comparation
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comparison
 of two maps of Grange Park, the top one is from 1920 and
a
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the
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 second is an updated version where we can overview the changes that had
occured
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occurred
 during the years. Going more into detail with the old map, the
firts atraction
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first attraction
 located in the middle just between the Arnold Avenue entrance and Eldon
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street's
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street
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Street
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 second entrance was a fountain. Over passing the fountain, on the left
handed-side
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,handed-side
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 there was a small stage where musicians use to be located and public seats just in front
ate
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 the very end with the walls behind. the seating area
sorounding
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surrounding
 the stage was filled with a rose garden in between.
This
 left section has
slighly
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slightly
 been changed where
intead
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instead
 of a small stage and separate seats it's been repurposed for an
Amphiteatre
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Amphitheatre
 for bigger concerts where
seating
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the seating
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 area
already
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is already
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 integrated.
Also
, between the two
entrances
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,entrances
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 there is a bigger and squared rose garden
surounded
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surrounded
 by seats in each corner. The old fountain it's been changed
for
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to
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 a bigger water waterfall located on the right bottom side of the park where in 1920 we use to found a glasshouse. There is
a
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apply
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now a children playing area on the right top corner facing followed by a cafe just next to the entrance
od
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of
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 Arnold Avenue.
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  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
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  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
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