The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following images show a

comparation

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comparison

of two maps of Grange Park, the top one is from 1920 and

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second is an updated version where we can overview the changes that had

occured

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occurred

during the years. Going more into detail with the old map, the

firts atraction

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first attraction

located in the middle just between the Arnold Avenue entrance and Eldon

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street

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second entrance was a fountain. Over passing the fountain, on the left

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there was a small stage where musicians use to be located and public seats just in front

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the very end with the walls behind. the seating area

sorounding

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surrounding

the stage was filled with a rose garden in between.

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left section has

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slightly

been changed where

intead

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instead

of a small stage and separate seats it's been repurposed for an

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for bigger concerts where

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area

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integrated.

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, between the two

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there is a bigger and squared rose garden

surounded

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surrounded

by seats in each corner. The old fountain it's been changed

for

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a bigger water waterfall located on the right bottom side of the park where in 1920 we use to found a glasshouse. There is

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now a children playing area on the right top corner facing followed by a cafe just next to the entrance

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Arnold Avenue.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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renovations
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landscaping
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historical elements
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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Fully explain your ideas

The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. Do you agree or disagree?

Competition for university study is becoming increasingly strong. Why are universities becoming more competitive? Is this apositive or negative development?

Many believe that to be successful in a particular sport, having a natural ability is more important than training and hardwork. Discuss both views n give your opinion.

Many people think dangerous sports should be banned. Do you agree or disagree.

ome companies have uniforms for their employees which must be worn when they are at work. What are the advantages for a business of having a uniform and are there any advantages of having uniform for their staff?