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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following image illustrates
a
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how to produce electricity from
renewal
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 energies like the river and shows the phases from
an
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 Hydroelectric
power
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station
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 until the
power
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 is generated for our use. The drawing
demostrates
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demonstrates
 how the
water
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form
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from
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 the river is directed on a Dam, creating a large
water
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 reserve that overnight remains closed and opens during the day providing the
water
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 intake for the rest of the process.
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this
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step
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 the liquid flows
trough
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through
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 a canal arriving at the
power
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station
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 overpassing reversible turbines that distribute some
water
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 onto a generator during the day and some other retained on a lower lever reserve outside the
station
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 so
water
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 can circulate pumping
over night
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overnight
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.
On
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 the
last
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 step, after the
power
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trespass
traspass
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 the generator leaves the
power
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station
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 area
this
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power
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 is transformed
onto
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into
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 energy that arrives
to
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at
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 National grids
trough
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through
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 the
power
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 lines that
allows
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 electricity to travel.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
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