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Education should be free to all people and should be paid for and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#education #people #government
It is argued that the states should provide free
education
 for all
of
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members
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the members
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 of society and
also
the
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education
 should be
manage
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 by
government
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the government
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. I totally agree with the statement, I believe
provide
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education
 for free for
people
 lead to
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boosts
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 principle of equality among
people
as well as
economy
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the economy
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 of
country
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the country
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, and
education
 should be under
supervision
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the supervision
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 of
government
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the government
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.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why I believe
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education
 should provide without fees.
Firstly
,
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education
 free means the
gab
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gap
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 between wealthy and poor
people
 will reduce.
This
 is because all
people
 have the same access to universities and schools.
Furthermore
,
students
not
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 need to work part-time to meet
fees
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the fees
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 of school or university, which means
students
 have enough time to concentrate and perform well
on
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 their
study
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studies
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.
Secondly
, free
education
 means the number of
students
 who will graduates from universities will increase, which means in future the country will have many
professional
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professionals
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 in different fields
such
 as
,
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 medicine, science,
technology
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and technology
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.
As a result
 ,those graduates will work in
a
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various sectors
namley
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namely
, healthcare,
education
,
IT
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and IT
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, which
this
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can assist to improve the economy
as well as
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the standards
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standards
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 living of individuals. In my opinion, the authorities should manage the
education
 system.
This
 is because if the
government
 run the
education
 system
they
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 can make
curriculum
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the curriculum
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 more
benefit
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 for
students
. To illustrate,
the
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lawmakers have specialists
on
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education
 who know the useful subjects for
students
on
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 their personal and professional life.
Additionally
,
run
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th
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the
education
 by
government
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the government
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 means all
students
on
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 all
part
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parts
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 of
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the conutry
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conutry
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country
 have
the
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 similar quality of
education
 rather than
run
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being run
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 by
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a paivate
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paivate
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private
company
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companies
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,
this
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is becaue
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becaue
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because
 some companies only
foucs
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focus
 on profits
regradless
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regardless
 of
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the quailty
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quailty
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quality
 of
education
. In conclusion, In my perspective, make
education
 without charge can bring numerous advantages
including
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, minimize the
gab
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gap
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 between affluent and poor
people
also
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and also
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increase
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 the number of
porfessional
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professional
people
on
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 crucial majors,
in addition
,
the
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runing
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running
education
 should
should
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by the
government
 to
ensuring
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ensure
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 the
quailty
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quality
 of
education
 provided for
students
.
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