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The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The column graph illustrates a comparison between the drinking
habbits
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habits
 separated by five different age ranges from the population in the United States. The two main trends in
American
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 population
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 that non-drinkers are the majority across all ages and most of the ex-drinkers are aged over 55 and 65 years old. The image shows that approximately 50% of
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the
american
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 population over 16 never drank alcohol. In more detail, people aged between 55-64 and 65-74
non-dirnking
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non-drinking
habbits
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habits
 decrease and starts
rise
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 the percentage of people who use to drink. We can
also
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 observe that light drinking habits are
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30% more common in younger generations aged between 25 to 34 years old, and approximately
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8% of heavy drinking rises in
americans
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Americans
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 aged between 35-34 and 45-54 compared to the rest.
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, more than
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half of adults
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in
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un
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 America never tried alcohol and heavy drinking habits decrease over elder generations rising the
percebtage
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percentage
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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