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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

#people #cities #face #life #government #move #towns
There is no denying the fact that there are many issues in live in
cities
. The question is, should the
governments
 encourage
people
 to move to the towns? In
this
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 I am going to write about some problems in
cities
, which
people
 face them
everyday
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. In terms of disadvantages,
nation
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 who live in
cities
 face many problems
everyday
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, some of
them
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which
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 are dangerous. The main reason provided to support
this
 claim is that
,
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 pollution is dangerous for our health. Another point we have to consider to it,
the
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traffic
 jams in
cities
 are so awful.
Therefore
,
the
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governments
 need to make different types of transportation. To illustrate, buses can help a lot of
people
.
In addition
, trains are useful in
cities
.
Moreover
,
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noisy
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 of
traffic
 and parties is a big problem.
This
 is because
,
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 plenty of
people
 study or work in their houses, they can not study or work well because
the
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noisy
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noise
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.
On the other hand
, parties are annoying for
people
work
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who work
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 in the morning, they can not sleep well. As for
governments
, what should do? I am going to draw a
sloution
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solution
 for each problem.
Firstly
, the pollution, the
governments
 need to change cars to electrical.
Also
, put a specific place for smoking.
Secondly
, the
traffic
 jams, they should
to
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build different types of transportation. Another thing, put a limit
hours
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 for the trucks to get side the city.
For example
, in
Riyadh
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 only three hours in the morning allow for the trucks
get
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 side. Looking at
noisy
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,
governments
 ought to stop the parties which
made
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in
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at
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night
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. As for
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the noisy
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noisy
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noise
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 of
traffic
, they need to put rules for things
make
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that make
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 the noisy,
such
us
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as
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 the horns. In conclusion,
although
 the
cities
 are the most comfortable place
for
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to
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live
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life
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,
government
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the government
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 ought to develop the towns and make
it
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them
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 similar
the
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cities
.
This
 is because
,
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people
 move
to
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there and low all these problems.
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