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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts show changes in
usage
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the usage
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 of
household
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 appliances from 1920 to 2019. The first chart represents
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
households
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 that used a washing machine, refrigerator, and a vacuum cleaner over the hundred years.
According to
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 the data,
highest
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the highest
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 used appliance in 1920 is the washing machine which was 40% of
households
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,
whereas
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 the lowest used appliance is the refrigerator which was approximately 5% of
households
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.
Vacuum
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The vacuum
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 cleaner has been used by 30% of
households
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. By 2019, both
vacuum
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the vacuum
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 cleaner and the refrigerator has been used by an equal number of
households
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 which is 100%,
whereas
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 the washing machine is used by approximately 75%. The second chart shows
number
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a number
the number
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 of
hours
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 of housework per week per
household
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.
According to
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 the data presented in the chart, in 1920 the number of
hours
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 of housework per week per
household
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 is 50
hours
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. But it has gradually decreased to 10
hours
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 per week per
household
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 by 2019.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, households, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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