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The percentage of overweight children in western societies has increased by almost 20 percent in last ten years. discuss the possible causes and effects of this disturbing trend and offer a solution

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Overweight
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one
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 of the major health problems that we have
in
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at
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 the present time. The most unfortunate issue with
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 is that the number of obese
children
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 has increased by almost 20
percent
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last
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the last
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 ten years.
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 is a huge burden of disease for
children
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, their families, and the governments as
overweight
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being overweight
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one
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 of the main
risk
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 factors
of
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for
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 chronic diseases
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 as diabetes, hypertension, cholesterol, and heart diseases in the future.
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possible
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 causes and effects of
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 major health issue and will provide a solution
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.
Lifestyle
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 factors can be identified as
one
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 of the main causes of obesity. Compared to the past decade,
children
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 have become more addicted to sedentary leisure
activities
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such
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 as video gaming, watching television, and using mobile phones rather than engaging in sports
activities
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 and outdoor
activities
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. Engaging in outdoor
activities
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 will improve blood circulation and reduce health
risk
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 factors
while
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 sedentary
activities
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 would cause accumulation of fat, poor blood circulation, and poor oxygen circulation which in
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 could increase the
risk
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 of obesity. Apart from
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle
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,
poor
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a poor
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 diet can be highlighted as another
risk
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 factor for
overweight
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being overweight
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.
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 the busy
lifestyle
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 of
parents
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,
children
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 tend to eat more takeaway
food
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 compared to the
last
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 ten years. Fast
food
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such
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 as burgers, fries, chicken nuggets, and fried chicken have become popular
food
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of
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for
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children
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.
These
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This
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 highly processed
food
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 contains high
suger
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sugar
, salt, and carbohydrate, and
low
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are low
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 on other necessary nutrients a child needs. These unhealthy
food
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 contribute to high cholesterol,
high
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and high
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 sugar levels in
body
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the body
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 which
body
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the body
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 transforms into fat and deposits in the body. Because of these unhealthy
lifestyle
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 choices,
children
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 are prone to chronic disease at a young age, and
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 could prevent them from enjoying their lives later on.
One
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 of the solutions that can be presented for
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 problem is education.
Parents
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 and
as well as
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children
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 should be educated on the
advers
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adverse
 effects of
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle
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 and unhealthy eating.
Children
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 can be educated through schools about the importance of having a balanced diet
everyday
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every day
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 and the benefits they will get by consuming
required
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the required
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 nutrients.
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, they will need to be educated on
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of eating fast
food
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 on a daily basis. Creative interventions can be used by
parents
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 to train their
children
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 to enjoy healthy foods
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 as
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and fruits. There are many available services that can be used by
parents
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 to meet
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 goal. They can get the help of a dietician,
a
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or a
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peadiatric
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paediatric
pediatric
 counsellor to assist them with finding the best way to
incoporate
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incorporate
 healthy foods
to
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into
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 their little
one
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's
meal
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. The second solution would be encouraging
children
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into
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engaining
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engaging
 in more outdoor
activities
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. For
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,
children
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 can be educated on
importance
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the importance
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 of physical
activities
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 and how much fun and enjoyment they can get from
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. Fun games
such
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 as hide and seek,
tag
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and tag
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, and sports
such
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 as badminton, cricket,
basketball
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and basketball
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 can be introduced to
children
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. It is important to show them how much fun they can get by doing
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intead
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instead
 of sitting on a chair playing video games.
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,
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 would be a great way to make new friends as well.
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,
parents
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 can involve in encouraging their
children
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 to engage in physical
activities
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 by taking them to a playground or a
children
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's park. They can
also
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 play with their kids to show how enjoyable it is.
To sum up
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lifestyle
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 interventions. The importance of everyone's participation in managing childhood overweight is beyond measure.
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