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Band 3.5

Nowadays eating habits or eating junk food is increasing. What extent do you agree or disagree

These days eating fast
food
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 is expanding. I completely agree with
given
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the given
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 statement and will discuss factors supporting my opinion
is
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in
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following
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the following
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 paragraph. First and foremost,
the
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apply
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canned
food
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 is not good for health because it is prepared by cheap products.
Mostly
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Most
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 young people like to eat street cuisine. Even though
doctor
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the doctor
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also
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 advised
to
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apply
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everyone better to
take
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make
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 homemade
meals
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. Nobody
listen
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listens
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 carefully
what
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to what
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 they say,
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However
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 they are
also
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 agreed but still eating.
On the contrary
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 when people are suffered from junk
food
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then
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 they understand only.
Apart from
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this
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,
homemade
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the homemade
a homemade
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 vegetable is more
benefit
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beneficial
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 for health if compare to frozen
meals
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. Outsider cook anyhow even not proper clean place. To add
on
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to
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 it,
new
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the new
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 generation
think
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thinks
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 that eating outside
food
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 is
fashion
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fashionable
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.
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Additionally
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,Additionally
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 fast
food
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 is liked to eat by some senior
citizen
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citizens
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 but
this
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 type of
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meals
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meal
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 more dangerous for them.
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 they are known
unhealthy
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to unhealthy
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food
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 difficult to digest. In conclusion, if you want good health so avoid junk
meals
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otherwise
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 you are got in terrible.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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