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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

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One of the serious issues facing the majority of large urban
areas
 is overpopulation. The main reason for
this
 is the lack of employment opportunities and lack of facilities in the rural
areas
, and the viable solution is for the government to incentivise its
citizen
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citizens
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 to stay in those
areas
. The number of
people
 allocating to urban
areas
 increases every year, causing overpopulation in the majority of urban centres. Most
people
 are seeking
for
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a better
job
 opportunity that can provide them with a higher income, a higher standard of living and a
job
 that allows them to prosper and develop their own growth. Since the city centres are often the centre of business districts compared to the rural
areas
,
people
wants
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 to secure a
job
 where they can ensure their work stability.
For instance
, Phnom Penh, the capital city of Cambodia is reported to be too crowded, as there is a large jump of
people
 moving to the capital cities to secure
themselves
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a career. A solution to help mitigate
this
 problem is to offer incentives to
people
 who are living in those towns with smaller populations. Since the primary goal of
people
 relocating to huge cities is because of capital,
therefore
, by giving
people
 allowances
such
 as house allowance can help prevent the issue.
In addition
, the government can
also
provide
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implement a scheme of equal wages, despite the work location.
For instance
, the South Korean government are giving allowance to their citizen who
lived
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 in a developing area, and providing more subsidies for farmers or workers who are working in those locations. In conclusion, the major urban problem of overpopulation caused by the excessive number of
people
 relocating to find a better
job
 in the city can be partly alleviated by the introduction of incentivising
people
 who
lived
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 in those underdeveloped
areas
. I would certainly stay in the rural area if it was introduced in my area.
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