Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.
In recent years, part-time has become a trend in
students
who study at University. However
, getting jobs when learning at school has several positive aspects, but it still exist
many Verb problem
has
limitation
.
On the one hand, there are Change to a plural noun
limitations
number
of advantages of taking a Change the article
a number
the number
job
. Firstly
, we can earn money from a job
to pay tuition fees or living expenses. It
appropriate for freshman who studies in Add a verb
It is
It was
the
first year at University as they Change the word
their
has
Change the verb form
have
a
Correct article usage
apply
space time
, which can support a part of Add a hyphen
space-time
cost
for their parents. Add an article
the cost
For instance
, beside
study hours, Replace the word
besides
students
can apply part-time
jobs, Change preposition
for part-time
such
as waitress and receptionist, which does
not require professional qualifications or certifications. Correct subject-verb agreement
do
Secondly
, doing part-time work allows students
not only to gain experience in their field but also
to become familiar with the work environment. This
means that when the students
graduate and join a company, they will feel comfortable and confident in their workplace.
On the other hand
, there are several positive aspect
of the above-mentioned point. In fact, Change to a plural noun
aspects
students
who engage in part-time jobs occasionally lose concentrate
on their studies, which can directly affect their academic achievements. Replace the word
concentration
For example
, students
might feel bored with studying and often dropping out of college. In addition
, students
who engage in both working and studying can harm in
their health leading to consequences. To illustrate, if Change preposition
apply
freshman
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freshmen
who
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apply
spent
much time Wrong verb form
spend
for
work, they would Change preposition
at
more
susceptible to damaged diseases.
In conclusion, given the clear advantages Add a missing verb
be more
taking
a Change preposition
of taking
job
when students
are in school have
, there are still limitations. Unnecessary verb
apply
Therefore
freshman
should carefully consider before applying for a Fix the agreement mistake
freshmen
job
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