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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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While
 some
people
 argue that doctors and engineers should work in their own
country
 where their academic background started,
other
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 take the view that working in another
country
 where they want to. In my opinion, it is better for them to work freely in various
countries
 of every part of the world. On one side of the argument,
people
 should not get
pressure
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 over choosing where should they begin a career life. Some of them love their mother
country
whereas
 there are other
sort
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 of
people
 who always dreamt about working and moving to developed
countries
. One of the compelling reasons for believing
this
 is that working in their own
country
 might
be
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raise
up
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the standard of living
due to
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especially
IT
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for IT
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 developers, doctors and engineers and so on.
The sophisticated
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people
 can spread
the
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knowledge which is the aspects of
ancient
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the ancient
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method
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 to modern technology.
For instance
, China is the
the
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most obvious
witnessed
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 from the worst situation to rapid development and now it become a part of the most developed
countries
. Despite these aforementioned views, I would argue that working
under
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in
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the
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 developed
country
yield
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 a better result. The comparison of salaries between the developed
countries
 and developing
countries
. Take an example, the annual income of a doctor who has five years
experience
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of experience
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 in
the
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 developed
country
 is higher rather than
same
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the same
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 person who has similar both academic
qualification
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qualifications
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 and experience in a developing
country
. In conclusion, there is a disagreement in society
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about
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 being a worker in another
country
. I strongly reckon that
people
 should get more money which is deserved
with
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 their efforts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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