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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#travel #group #tour #guide #support
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Taking
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tour
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a tour
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guide
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help
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to help
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 to visit the tourist
places
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 is actually an effective method.I completely agree with
this
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 opinion
i
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I
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 think
lot
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a lot
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 of benefits we get from them. Even though we spend money, it is worth it. First of all,I believe that the
tour
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guide
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 knows all the things about the
places
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 we want to visit
such
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 as resorts,
weather
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the weather
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 in that place,Food
as well as
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 the famous tourist
places
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 and history behind that.
For instance
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,If people want to go to Kerala,Which
is
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is also known
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also
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 knows as God's own country .Individuals are newcomers to that place,they
dont
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don't
 know anything about the place.
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However
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,However
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 we have smart gadgets like mobile phones to know
weather
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the weather
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,Famous restaurants and
the
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apply
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information whatever we want.But,I think
by
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apply
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taking help from
tour
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 guides has
lot
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a lot
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 of merits for tourists to make their trip memorable.
Secondly
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, The visitors are newcomers
do
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who do
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 not know anything about the customs and traditions
as well as
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 rules and regulations.
Unintenionally
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Unintentionally
 tourists suppose
do
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to do
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the
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apply
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thing
that is
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 actually
a
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apply
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incorrect in that area
then
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 travellers
has
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have
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 to face
lot
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a lot
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 of problems on their own.For
this
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 kind of
problems
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problem
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actually
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,actually
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 the
guide
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 helps.
In addition
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, He told
everything
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us everything
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 about the
places
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 and the things to do and not to do
as well as
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 he will instruct all the precautions before
the
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apply
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travelling like taking
a
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apply
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clothes
according
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toaccording
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,which type of shoes are better ,
The
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and The
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 food .So,
To keep
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Keeping
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 the
tour
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guide
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 is the best option to have a safe journey.
To sum up
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,I strongly believe that guides are very helpful to visit new
places
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 .Because, For the travellers the journey makes memorable,
comfortable
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and comfortable
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 with no worries and Safety.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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