Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Steve Whang, Why? Who is
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president of the soccer team in Inter Mylan When he was
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years old in Two thousand and
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Italy for the season in SERIE "A", I admire your personality and I
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same conviction, He studied in China
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and currently owns
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of the club in Europa, I want your same personality and maybe
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have your ambitions and
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projects
, for my the most characteristic that he has is his dedication and tolerant, when he manages finances to be able, to each
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very regular how the
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people
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in the world, I would buy a
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team in United Stated, my advantages and supports to information
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are the Finances books and New Notices,
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all the people in
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live with my family in Europa to a good life
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because in Bolivia the streets are very dangerous and the Politics and current President are very
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bad
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jobs, I rather a life with dreams and good experiences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • luck
  • determination
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • skills
  • continuous learning
  • achievements
  • opportunities
  • networking
  • personal accountability
  • diverse backgrounds
  • access to resources
  • causality
  • creative industries
  • structured fields
  • linear
  • predicated on merit
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