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The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the average consumed
calories
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 in seven
countries
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 including, the United
States
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, India, New Zealand, Somalia, China, Mexico, and Indonesia, in 2003, United
States
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 consuming nearly 3400
calories
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 had the highest average and just after that New Zealand was in second place by 3300
calories
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while
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 The other six
countries
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 were consuming significantly less amount of
calories
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. Explicitly one can arrange them into three different categories regarding their average calorie consumption . The United
States
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 and New Zealand were in the first category and right after them in second place there were Spain and Mexico. The third place consists of four
countries
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 including China, India, Somalia, and Indonesia which are sorted correspondingly from the highest to the lowest calorie consumption in the category.
overall
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, the United
States
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 had the highest and,
by contrast
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, Indonesia, by intaking less than half of the average for the United
States
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 and New Zeeland, had the lowest average calorie consumption among all the eight
countries
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Vocabulary: Replace the words calories, countries, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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