IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The image illustrates the steps to obtain
sugar
from growing Use synonyms
sugar
cane. Use synonyms
Overall
, the plant needs to go through 7 different manufacturing phases before arriving in the Linking Words
sugar
state.
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First,
the cultivation process can take between 12 to 18 months until the canes are ready to be harvested. When the plants have grown enough, the next phase is harvesting them which can be done in two different ways depending on the production extension. For bigger productions, it is normally done with the help of agricultural machinery, Linking Words
while
for smaller quantities Linking Words
this
step is done manually pulling the plant one by one.
The third step is crushing the raw material to obtain a juice, that later on, will be purified with a limestone filter. In order to create the syrup, the liquid will have to be heated at high temperatures inside the evaporator machine, which will Linking Words
also
centrifuge the syrup to separate the Linking Words
sugar
crystals. The Use synonyms
last
step is to let the Linking Words
sugar
cool and dry until it becomes in a Use synonyms
sugar
state ready to be consumed.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
sugar
comes from a natural resource from agricultural practices, Use synonyms
however
, needs to be processed with specific chemistry machines to obtain the final result.Linking Words
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