The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
cities
of
population
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the population
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has
increase
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increased
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from four
countries
in 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, most of the
countries
has
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increased in these years. But, only the Philippines was reduced from
the
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1990 to 2010. In the past years before 2020,
the
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Indonesia
and Malaysia’s
population
from
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the city
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city
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cities
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has
increase
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faster than
other
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in other
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countries
.
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Indonesia
has 10%
population
live in
city
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cities
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in 1970, and
the
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Malaysia has about 30%
population
in the
city
, but in 2020 there have about 50% and 75%
population
living in
cities
from
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in
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the
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Indonesia
and Malaysia. Compare with them, the
Philippine
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Philippines
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and Thailand only rise to 45% and 30% in 2020 the
population
living in the
cities
from 31% and 19% in 1970. Back to the future of the 2030 and 2040, the four
countries
is
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similar to each other and their
population
in the
city
both are increasing so fast. For 2030 to 2040
the
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Malaysia is
top
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the top
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one
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population
in the graph, and
the
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Indonesia
is
second,
the
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third and fourth are
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and Thailand.
Therefore
the four
countries
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countries'
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cities
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cities'
city's
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population
will continue increasing in the future.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, population, countries, indonesia, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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