Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays some people argued that protecting wild animals from their extinction is useless, rubbish for money and time. From my point of view, I completely disagree

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with, the world is not

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for just human beings. To put it another way, we do not have any rights to

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of other

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, there is nothing special in

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humans, animals and plants are connected, influenced and interacted

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other which protects existing of them. To give a clear example, in Australia, they hunted wolves because they were feeding on

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were overstocked

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, not having enough food, they

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died. In the second place, critters have many advantages and benefits to humanities.

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researchers have been discovering great remedies and drugs

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especially from wild animals.

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sea snail, is now treating chronic pain, what is more, we are looking into

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of invasive cancers and Alzheimer's disease, which are untreatable conditions in

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time, from wild creatures.

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, many people's work and income consist

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, some photographers and even television show and magazine workers.

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, we have to support their living and

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because they are

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which has to be balanced.

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they have beneficial sides

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field.

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we have to keep

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protection of their lives in the future.

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